Booya.

It's so hard to suceed in survival, almost impossible to turn a smile..
Only the fittest survive! every ssecond of life is worth a while..

^^ technically i can't explain why i like this, but damn it really provoked a though for me, which was quite rare from both writers. this sort of concept doesn't really brush with me, since 95% of writers write to it, its hard to create new angles and aspects to it. but...

Restricted- your rhyme scheme was as basic as they come, you had one word rhymes at the end of the bars and that was it; very dissapointing. you had no technically advance in your lines. your writers was quite strong though, but i wasn't really feeling your piece.

Deadly- your rhyme scheme was more complex than restricted, i know you can make it alot more complex, but even judging it on this performance it emphasized restricted lack of scheming on rhymes. poetic techniques were prominent in here; with some similies etc. nothing to to special in this area ot be honest, but nonetheless showed restricted up. your emotion that i sensed in this was what amazed me to be honest; being personal and the way you expressed that from your writers voice was brilliant! I cant' see any aspect of this battle that you didn't excede restricted in.

V/Deadlyvision

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