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Old 06-16-04, 09:05 PM   #8
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aight jesus's father this isnt a hate vote im jus tryin to give u some tips my vote is gona be for verbal violence even though it was a close battle im votin for him cause he had a better structure that was easy to read and even though in real life if u used the same lines jesus woulda won, on rb its all about how it looks and flowsa cause ppl arent hearin it theyre readin it. i jus gota say u need to work on personals metaphors u got and work on ur structure try jus makin a line put 3 dots then do another line and itll read better aight keep elevatin good luck and good luck on our battle too

v/verbal