aight not the greatest but has potential..

suddenly a fuckin board just cracks over your head/
just be a suicide from tha drug facts i placed in your bed/
first of all this line dosent make any sence at all,or the one under it
vip ya gotta pratice ya personals n flow,or else ya'll never win,ya gotta get his name in there for some wordplay(tutorial)

spitz ya flow was good n ya had some punches that destroyed what he had ya on the right track just try n get more complex wit ya ryme scheems n stretch the shit out a bit more(tutorial) ican't stress how much ya can learn if ya just keep readin them.
breakdown
punches/spits
flow/spits
multis/none
creativity/spits
vocab/spits
overall/spits honest vote/spits