Pretty good piece. I liked what I saw, and it had all the fundamentals, and emotions were processed well and some nice metaphors were incorporated. I liked these lines right here:
The well dried up long ago..the door of escape is the plan
I'm banging to escape..but the door of escape is jammed
^those flowed very well and were very tongue in cheek.

My only conflict is, you can't stay too consistent, you can put together a good piece, but some lines can come off incredibly weak and it brings down the piece as a whole. I haven't read any of your other shit so this is an unbiased opinion, and im just giving it to you straight. Good piece, just work on a few things.

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and that...is cool.