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Great clear piece with a solid flow. This was awesome. Obviously a sad story but it was really well done. What I really enjoyed of this piece was the vocabularly and descriptive lines.
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Originally Posted by Baron Mynd
as they acted out his dream .. which i then stared & admired ..
.. sensing the love & friendship, captured in those flares of sapphire
They conversated intellectually .. the male gazing a while ..
.. to marvel at the beauty, held inside her radiant smile.
The couple walked carelessly, through emerald blades of grass ..
.. when suddenly .. A group of white youths came wading past.
This was more than he could take; so he finally lashed out ..
.. but in just a matter of seconds .. He was beaten back down.
The male was injured badly .. couldnt manage even a step ..
.. and so he had to lie helpless; as she was beaten to death.
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I have read over stuff u have done and I have been like WOW, but for some reason I wasnt wowing at this, is was a great piece none the less tho.
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