I'm ready to battle at all times, it's 4:56 in tha mornin//
There's a ship goin to "Garbage MC's Island"....
......You're tha first one boardin//
-complete filler line, horrible opener
Poetic's face is bruised, it's obvious I'm beatin him//
I'll leave this kat so ugly........
.......He'll have to pay his pillows to sleep wit em//
-alright comedy line, but not a LOL
Your "diets" lookin bad cuz ya chances are "slim", so yo boyz gave to tha needy//
They "fed" you lines to help you win, but you still won't beat me//
-punch didnt hit at aLL
If you a prophit make a miracle, end world hunger & quench tha worlds thirst//
Nevermind you already showed me a miracle.......
.........You came up with a verse//
[COLOR=royalblue]-real good Line, i had a Little LaFF on this ONe
No matter what i'm gunna win this battle, like it or not//
You suck so bad that if you went to hell you still wouldn't be hot//
-this line was good, but it lacked vocab, dont be so blunt
It took you so long to write yo verse that you didn't make that deadline//
I read "Whack Magazine" yesterday.......
...............Good news! you made tha headline//
-corny
But ya flowz are smooth..........Bout as smooth as gravel//
Nigga you needed GOOD LUCK just to LOSE this battle.
-good line, i wud give it a 6/10 as a closure

//i chose this verse to critque b/c the other one was garbage\\
vote: iLL TemPa

return the favor, the battle is in my sig...

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