wow that was alot to read but it was pretty good...good emotion and depth...decent structure t was choppy at times...wordplay was good...some ok multies...i think the biggest thing you gotta work on is structure its not too bad but its not that great either...nice consistency overall good piece......(next time make it shorter lol) overall : 8/10 ~!1!~

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