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Old 06-23-04, 04:06 AM   #18
Dissonance
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lol, I know I already told you that I liked your complexity by your "play" with words. So obviously it wasn't "too complex", just want to point out though, that there were only two complex bars in that whole spit:

you battled the wrong creature, tell me, what's the purpose/
coz your lyrics are very healthy, mines are sicker that Magic Irvin/
or Irvin Magic, whatever you preffer, you fag-got/
(I just don't get it...given I don't know who the hell Magic Irvin is, so maybe flipping his name meant something and it all tied in with "wrong creature" hell if i know...very complicated...possibly another level I won't ever achieve...ah well)

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so fasho, we could see saw/
i went first, gave you a plate and now you have something to feed off/
(I definately got it...but it actually was complicated. I understood the "see saw" and "feed off" didn't catch the "see saw" and 'lifting him up' though...but technically the lifting him up part wasn't at all part of the play, since you never said anything about elevating him...the see-saw/feed off was good though.)

Other than those two punches...everything was extremely basic. Good rhymes, not too bad of a flow, but here:

or Irvin Magic, whatever you preffer, you fag-got/
my rhyme will amaze and shock you like a surge of static/
(shock you like a surge of static huh? no hate...just not a good punch)

man, this is the precise reason that i clown dudes/
yea, i know, i'm harsh and you might say i'm a hater/
but man, you exhale stank rhymes that fuck up our Ozone layer/
(nothing in there was a play and "exhale...fuck up our Ozone layer" was just aight)

just thought I'd elaborate on your "Too complex for ya'll" comments...I'm pretty sure most of these monkeys can get your spit...two bars out of a whole verse shouldn't be enough to lose you a battle
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