here's the honest breakdown...

first up is sparsin

Damn this cat's at 6 post and started 2day!
Cant hit me im a ghost, that parted him gay
5
since you just a NewB, ill teach you a few things
dont tell people you new me, b4 I blow out ya brains
4
you should travel back in time, stop yourself from sendin that PM
askin to battle agaisnt mine, shit couldnt beat anyone that was Sleepin
5
since ya flow just falls apart, read better from end to start
a vampire would be dead from these stakes to the heart
5.5
we dont expect ya to resond, since your foggotton flow
Sparsin the King, u just a pawn Check mate its over bro
5.5
alright dude...it seems like you could be decent you just need to concentrate less on talking about yourself and more on making funny disses about the other person...throw in some meta's personals about his name and stuff...


forgotten flow...
you can call me the fortune teller, cause forgotten flow's seein a win,
I'm goin straight for knock outs, aint got no time to be sparrin wit sin,
7 nice personal
and I'm a real nigga, never hesitent to pull shit,
this mans 20 years old, spittin 10 bars of bull shit,
6.5 decent personal
he told me to ask my mom, he gets around...
... but come to my town, and i'll be quick to settle ya ass down,
5
see Flow speaks shit that'll leave you scared,
and if you think you see a win then ya visions impared,
5
I aint 50 cent but here's some advice, dont push me,
You'll never make it as a rapper stick, to bein a pussy,
5.5
now I got one last thing to teach ya ass before i say goodnight,
think about usin punchlines... its not a jab, but it still can end a fight...
8

nice spit for a newbie...good job...you kind of lost it for 3 bars but still not bad...not bad at all...good job man...

v forgotten...

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