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Old 06-24-04, 01:42 PM   #11
femcee
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Da Pimp:
my premonition is for you to STOP, drop and roll real quick//
before i lite that fire on your azz like irritated steroidswhen you shit//
-good opener...
to spit at you is not worth my time I'd rather nibble on your sister's clit//
or smack your mami's azz from the back while I chew on her tit//
-see this kinda shit, yo mama jokes and rhymes is how you lose a battle
You're insane, to wanna battle, I should call 9-1-1//
have you nothing to say? Are you speachless? or is your mouth full of my cum?//
-911 and my cum... they dont flow
You're a Kinkos kinda rapper, who portrays a thug...do you hear laughter?//
if copied lyrics were what I'm after, I'll logon and listen to Napster//
-stretched lines, would hae been a good punch but it didnt flow
I'm done, and you are finished, throw in the towel before you begin//
Since Biggie Smalls won't be using them, I bet he has some lyrics to lend//
-streched lines again...closure gets 6/10

Comments: many streched lines which made you flow off, your creativity was nothing beyond basic, and your punches didnt hit for the majority of the verse...

Atticus:

(Nice And Easy To Start Out)
I PROVE-MORE-POINTS Then Eistien Gettin Seazed For Steriods-Crimes...
And Have Ya Lose-More-JOINTS Then Whitney Gettin On-Airlines//
-beautiful opener... keep that up
My Words-Dispurse Like A Hurse-To-Verse To Shake-Mouths...
And You'll Never Equally Verse-Spirts Of My Caliburs-Girth Until SUBWAY-Helps//
-mouths/helps...?? nice multis though
(Turn It Up Alittle)
No-One Calls Kid A "PIMP" Yet He Claims To "Have A Foot In The-Hoes"...
But The Only Time His HOES-RUN Is When He's Switching From Drag To Some-Cloths//
-nice punch...nice creativity and a good structured line
This-Bitch Isnt My "TYPE",Couldnt Even FUCK-Me If He-Tried While Screwin-The-Board...
And His-SPITS Only BREAK THREW After He Gets Off His Nees An Shouts YOU-GOT-SERVED!//
-punch was decent... this lacked structure and vocab
Wants Nothing-But To Be Pimp, Like 50-Cent...
But Unless He's Suming-Up His Life Savings He'll Never Reach-What-Ferraris-Set//
-decent...closure gets 7/10

comments: the majority if not all of you verse flowed nicely, had some tip punches in there, and had a solid structure....

tally up: Da Pimp had a decent verse all together and had a few good lines and a few bad ones... Atticus had a pretty good verse, had nice punches and good flow, a little creativity and had an original structure to 'em....


~Fem~ return the favor, i got a few battles open

vote: Atticus
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