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Old 06-25-04, 02:46 AM   #15
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iunno why.. but roopys verse was so simple... i could redict everyline almost..
and if you didnt get it,, he was disson on old dudes avy.. that taliban lookin ish.. but yea.. wasent a bad battle..

roop:

I thought we were battling and not putting down orignized shit
wat the fuck was dat Kanye couldn't even make dat into a hit/1
^worded horribly.. mighta hit harder wit better wording...

Three battles, yet no win, compared to u, i'm soaring
G, ur rhymes boring, any worse and u'd be makin me snoring/2
^sleepin on niggas is played out..

Your flow was off, well nevermind, pretty good for a queer
I'm tryin to be sincere but u ain't never goin to get a cheer/3
^ok bar

Da win is almost near, i love rhymin as an alcholic loves beer
See my sheer skills compared to your mere skills, wonder why i got a rap career/4
^the second line.. sheer and mere...the way u used em didnt sound good...

Bar five, time for me to thrive and for u to take the dive
I beat u so hard and left u scarred, I bet u wish u weren't still alive/5
^the wording thing again.. bar might have been decent wit diff wording..

whitey:
now i know you aint a rapping man matter of fact i seen you on a comercial for the taliban//
chemically imbalance this shit aint no challenge im a mack pimpin your familly back in iran//
^first line was good, felt it..second line messed it up.. with differnt wording it could have been dope..

to fresh to be releaseed, let me tear you apart peice by peice//
those rhymes are shitty they make mine look like a masterpiece//
^ok punch

he never will have a good record facing me, his wife said hes to small so shes on the corner asking "any takers" //
rejected by a white guy dont deny you got yo ass busted more times then when the pistons faced the lakers//
^ok line.. the laker part is played now tho..but it was decent

why does this guy roop continue to push me, they call him a fagget cause he allergic to pussy//
this aint attack of the clones, its more likes a bitch getting a boned its true see//
^decent

who knew that a white boy str8 out da hood would come in and beat this arab, well i did//
you say you from orlando but the magics gone, its tragic to know you even flow, get the towl off your head kid//
^notice I corrected your spellin mistakes :P...decent punch at his avy..


let me end it like apu, im to sweet so act like a dog and take this treat//
"get out of my qwiki shop cause you just got beat"//
^filler

both verses were decent.. but i think you both need to elevate on your vocabulary usage... i think over whitey took this.. just barely..his rhyme scccccheme was more complex..

v/whitey
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