alright here check this

the metaphor: your shit was pretty good mayn..i can see you have MAD POTENTIAL..some of your lines were ok but if you worded them differently they would be sick...your personals were ok...but again if they were worded more intelligently it would of been better...punches...were pretty good...vocab...not there but you tried...flow was there..and strucuture wasnt that good...keep elevatin you have the potential to be a vet

RIFF RAFF: vocab..you had better vocab then him...and you sounded more intelligent when you spit your verse..your good too...but if you worded some things better it would of been SICK....your punches were there...some lines were funny...personals were there aswell...and you had better flow and structure.....keep elevatin you good mayn

vote: RIFF RAFF

can u return the favour and drop an honest vote in this battle:
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=131625

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