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Old 06-28-04, 12:55 AM   #8
M&rk
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Someone told you ya good? yave been a ploy in an elaborate con
Must be R.Kell's publicist cuz ya think u'll get famous when shitted on
~~~nice shit, good punch, funny as hell.
Switchin gear for a minute so let me just pull back the clutch
Impersonated ya gurl in this battle......and left me untouched
~~~funny punch, nice first line leading in made filler though, butnice.
decent verse for prolly not takin any time wit it at all, but i didnt see any wordplay, hook some of that up next time.

ak23*(**(*
awful structure
aight, you call yourself potential...../
i know people with more potential thats mental in pshyciatric centers/
~~ya only punch but it was a pretty good one, 5 more of these u woulda been right there, good.

the rest u had way too much self glorification with the......... im hip hop your not, sayin u cool and shit aint battlin. and ya,just admit it, your spirits diminished/
your nothing, your finished/
thats mad filler. decent verse u got a clue what u doin thats good, but add more puches fix stucture and leave out self glorification, u should at least have a punche every other line maybe lead into the punch with the first line bein a self glorifing one but thats it keep that shit out as much as u can.

vote-potential.

good job not pm for votes, thats illegal preciate it, it says in the rulez when u vote u can drop ya link or have battles in ya sig only way ta follow it.this was a complete honest vote. one, hit my battles up in my sig. peace
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