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Old 06-28-04, 03:48 AM   #12
Plutonium
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I reckon More L took this battle because his lines aren't up and down like Rascal's verse, which is long, then short, and More L was more consistent and put more wit into his punches, Rascal's verse wasn't bad, but it looks like he filled a lot of his verse with dots, and the middle part of Rascal's verse was just hard to read, unless u can find a explaination, the middle part i find it hard to rhyme with, i dunno if you're not trying or something, but your verse is just not as good as More L, who has better punchlines, while Rascal's punches are played:

'Cause you need time..
............to prewrite before the battle could begin..
Your verse like your Country just going down under..
thought someone was hyping you up...
...........When they said here comes the boy blunder..
^^one of the good lines from Rascal

Looked at your profile where i found "Money and Wealth"..
Rascal solves the problem..
..............................By Ko' this man of his ill health..
^^ another of the better lines from Rascal


but it made no change, because your whole rap was rolling badly
all your words useless like a fingerless nigga at a bowling alley
how can you call yourself a veteran champ u a veteran chump
got confused when your girl had a dick and and didn't have a cunt
^^my favorite line from more L

The only part More L screwed up at is the ending, but the rest is good

vote: More L

plz hit up my battle and put a honest vote into it thank u:
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132116

good battle overall; good job to both of you

peace
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