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Old 06-28-04, 04:59 AM   #20
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Metah: I felt like you had good structure, and the overall flow was great. The punchlines were hitting, however the last 6 lines i didnt like the wordplay. They didnt seem to fit together well, and it made your verse end weak. Also, you didnt need to numbers, I think everyone can count punchlines.

KCF: You also had good structure, I believe you had the better flow. You def hit him hard with the personals. Your punchlines just sounded a lot harder than his, and you had much better word play. I think "Screename" and "be the same" sounds better than "Pheonix" and "Penis".

Vote = KCF