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Old 06-28-04, 05:42 PM   #41
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From: floduh
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Ill Tempa
I'm 2 and 0 wit 2 KO's, so you betta bring all yo weapons//
This nigga wanted me to spit first, cuz he's used to sloppy secI
- good opener
keep it 10-16 lines, cuz my shit is short -n- sweet//
Your like a legless track runner, you just can't competeonds
-punch was pretty good

I open my mind, find tha rhymes, and let him have it//
It looks like he stood behind a screen door and some1 threw shit at it//
-lol funny
His parents offered me money to find him cuz he got kidnapped//
I found this chump in "Textual Territory", gettin "Bitch Slapped"//
- i like how u used that against him
This nigga got a set of "Dentures" made just for "Biting"//
But he's still no good, like a cake without tha icing//
-like the first line the second was an ok punch
Ya "Breath" stays "Hot" so when you "Spit Lyrics" they "Reek"//
He's so dumb he takes a "Ruler" to bed to see how "Long" he sleeps//
-first line i liked alot but the sec was played out
U got 40 posts and no record, garbage history//
This battles over, I win, by Flawless Victory.
-Really good ending and personal

Atticus
Homie Couldn't Be-TEMPERED If He Needed-To-Blacksmith!...
And ILL?, Not Even When He's-Tethered To His TEMPA-pedic-Matress//1
-didn't get the first line and the sec was good liked how u used his name
I'LL Up The TEMPA-ture When My Lines-CEL-YA-THIS-Art...(CELYATHIS/CELCIUS)
And Send-Ya-Verse Into ORBIT So You Can Say Your High-In-The-Charts//2
-first line i didnt like the sec was not a very good battle punch and the name thing is getting played out
And He Says I SPIT-After Cuz I Love Them-Sweet-N'-Sloppy...
But This-BASTEREDs Been On My -STEM- Like His Meters'-Used-Unproperly//3
-didnt understand it
Daym And Just-Look At All Of Your -Punches-...
Never Mind Jokes, Just-Look, It's Sad I Gota Show You What You Should Come-With//4
-didnt even rhyme
Says He Can RUN CIRLCLES Around-Me, But Not Even With Geometric-Math-Tools...
Cuz He Has No FOOTING Around-Me Like A Leggless-Track-Crew//5
-He didnt say the circle part but good flip on sec
Tryn Be-Defiant By Sayin I'll Do 10-16 Instead Of Within-Those-Asked-For-By-Me...
But He's-Lying About Not Listenen-See,Cuz Just Then-He-Didn't-Go-Past-Line-14!//6
-good ending

overall this was a soso battle.Atticus had a few good lines,but some didnt make sense and were lacking basic skills like with rhyming. Ill Temp had a little more better lines than atticus even know one of em was played out his was just more on point this time.

VOTE=Ill Tempa