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Old 06-29-04, 07:14 AM   #12
sporadic
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Dropping a vote

this battle practically already given me this win
ima drop him out like Jin after his single and album
i see this battle in the future its a 5-0 outcome

Im assuming these three line throw together coz there was no flow on first two lines..weak punch also..especially the 5-0 outcome

Well I'ma show you what, you gon' feel my rush
You don't feel it, then it must be too real to touch

bittem from eminems rabbit run on the 8 mile ost

Pen Explodes Blaq-Ink explodes all over himself
I'm shootin you over, you cant see me im Stealth

Not really a punch in this either..weak

After this battle, be worried about ur lyrical health
I'm like a skillet bubblin until it filters up
I'm about to kill you, I can feel it buildin up

Bitten again..same song

Im your MC's worst dream, I make 'em tense
You hate me, see me and shake like a chainlink fence

Bitten again..do you have your own rhymes

ecueD most of this verse was bitten..so therfore i cant give you any constructive criticism..sorry

aight yo..yo..yo..
yo Duece youre a diss-qualified newbie and im qualified to diss u]
but it takes quality to grasp that punch so it will likely miss u]

Tha was aight..could ov been better though

nigga dont push me cause i can empty the clips and the shells from my baretta]
wet ya wit lectures intetion to put shells on ya like master shredder]
(ninja turtles master shredder)

ok punch..still not great liked the imagintion though

witness grasps tiell it best ya come played ya sub par an im deli fresh like sub-way]
ya dunb gay unoriginal fuck face ya verse is so 'plan' ya sholud sticl to run ways]

typos like fuck on this...from what i could read it was aight some aight concepts

over saturating moultis to cover ya lack of contents]
like roundin ta dollars ya rap is NON-CENTS]

thas was good in my view nice wordplay

there no need to be afraid u goin against the freestyle monster
cause ya lame ryhmes couldnt blow-up even if u was like a talibans rocket-launcer

weak..didnt like that

blaq-ink- there were a couple of good concepts in this verse..some decent word play aswell..your structure is pretty fucked though try and keep a consitant structure it makes the verse flow and look better..punches were aight but not great..try and hit some personals find out some shit about ur opponent that will prove to be effective

vote blaq ink- his opponent bit lines..so he should be dqued..
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