first bar your hung out to dry,like jesus bitch i crucify...
place you in the public eye with raps like that they'd turn a blind eye...
Not a great opener, but decent- shows potential
i'm shining bright with lyrics thats fluorescent,bitch is dull hire a cosmetic...
touch up them lyrics shits pathetic you aint a battler just more poetic...
this flows pretty good, not a great punch though
my shits leaving Orijional parasympathetic 'n' dont think i'll be sympathetic...
i'll diss 'n' rip ya like a surfer rips tides then up 'n' leave fuck being apologetic..
lol good vocab.. i really like the first line, decent punch.
it's the way my brain ticks that says unload these clips fill em with lead..
so much i could flip this inbred 'n' write my next track with his head...
lmao- very good punchline, it flows well into it... above par bar here.
with lyrics so sick i'll leave u malcontent as i beat you with circumvent...
thats my intent i torment mc's so much they need there parents consent...
beat you with circumvent- doesn't work really well, forced vocab- decent following line but not great.
like parental guidance as i carry a warning cas i spill blood and guts...
so get off my nuts,bitch could'nt be a smash if you was a dish washer klutz...
lol- nice punch.
as i upset 'n' leave you like a epeleptic so once u read this you'll throw a fit...
cas i straight up beat you "orginal" so write that in your life's diary bitch....
kinda weak closer... I think your opener and closer were the weakest part of your verse... but the body of the verse had some good punches... decent verse all in all.


MAG is battlin newbies so he can get his record up/
Ya game is ass, is like Charlotte Bobcats startin' lineup/
decent opener-
You think you MAGnificent just because you got 10 wins/
Ya rhymes ain't authentic, is like a flower logo on timbs/
kinda played punch with the timbs line- decent though
Let me put the MAGnum toward ya forehead and cock it back/
U gonna get zero listeners, like William Hung's soundtrack/
decent- not spectacular but o.k
U say "the champ is here!", but U meant "the chump is here!"/
Right now, U Toni Braxton N I'm Bobby, I tore Ur whole fuckin career/
egh, not really feelin this punch too much- first line was good though
Let me knock U out like Tarver did 2 Jones, start da action/
I'll beat U down, U'll have mo' surgeries than Micahel Jackson/
i say it everytime I read an MJ line--- its played... Everyone mentions Michael Jackson its getting old, theres only so many ways it can be flipped- the Tarver and Jones line was good... I used somethin similar to that the day after the fight, its old to me but decent.
Right now, I'm MAGnificent and gonna take ya whole spot/
My M16s will make covered in spots, than a hoe thru cumshots/
you didn't word this right at all... it doesn't flow and your missin a noun, and an adjective or two.
So from now on, dont be cocky thinkin U all bomb/
Cuz son, you nuttin' but a joke like 'Chappelle's Show' sitcom/
this didn't flow great, kinda weak closer.... I think all in all your verse was decent but nothing really stuck out and you did have a couple weak parts... I think that Mag had better punches and just a better verse in general... Good luck in the future both of you... ez.. Vote Mag

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