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Old 06-30-04, 09:32 PM   #1
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can i get some criticism on my style

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this is a quick 10 any feedback welcome...


i've lost a few battles, my style i start to question
maybe i'll find some answers in the open mic section
when i start checkin and try and get votes like an election
but no matter how i hard try i always seem to come second
all the feeback says i do well but my words lack structure
every text battle feels like it's the cold war and i'm russia
people came and start dissing me but victory i can taste it
there words start missing me but history repeats and i hate it
so i keep practising, elevating waiting to blow up like a bomb test
but the odds aren't on my side like mini-me in a dunk contest

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