Well I actually sit down and read this over. I am guessing both of you were hinting towards pieces of poetry. I must say, I am very appreciative of these types of work.

I think both of these would make good readings at any poetry reading. Minus a word or two from both of you:

Hoops - Pissed(Try something like distressed)
G-Ballz - Damn, Fuckin(I know it helps to show the extent of your pain, but these words come off as unintelligable)

They both seemed to tie in well with each other. The flow of each was never off. I think hoops went from line to line and stanza to stanza very well. G-Ballz, you did tend to end what you were saying and go to another line with something new.

The structure of both was very well. If you were reading this to someone I dont think it would matter much. Since this is visual and its left up to me to read it, I think Hoops had a better structure. He broke it down into nice stanzas, and each one stood for a period in time about his love. I.E (falling in love, in love and breaking up)

It was real hard to take a pick between the two, as I did like and feel both pieces. However I felt Hoops piece had a little more of an impact on me.

V/Hoops