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Old 07-02-04, 01:03 PM   #8
illiance
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Once again I can't vote yet but everyone needs crits sometimes:

BodoBounce: Nice verse, the first I've read from you and I automatically figured you'd beat Datruth cos I've read a mediocre verse from him in another thread. It was all pretty simple, not many multi's and a simple rhyme scheme but the funny punches made me laugh so it's all good - fav. line was:
"Being around me is dangerous, nigga im claimin
That you’ll never be safe, like fat kids runnin bases"
But that "crack of dawn" line is WAY overplayed.

DaTruth: I figured Bodo had got you on this battle but you opened up pretty strong, the "more worn that your outfit" line was overplayed but it's still funny as hell so it's all good. You fell of half way through with the "hard to piss" line cos that didn't really mean much, it was just kidna filler but the ending was strong too.

If I could vote, it would be for DaTruth but only marginally.

Peeze.
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