QBSMASHER
Im safe till you get me lit like dynamite
I know your gonna come soft like anthracite
good metiphore on 2nd line 5/10
But you wont be able to match what i had to say
If you were jessica simpson and took my breath away
ur in wrong tense with had,good metiphore/wordplay 5/10
You couldnt read my rhymes if you were the paper
Not even if you burnt it and inhaled the vapor
paper can't read either, seemed filler 3/10
I write verses harder than tutankhamen
Curse is so sick sudden death is not uncommon
i didnt think tutankhamen cursed with sudden death. 4/10
Ive taken and layed more tracks than C-S-X
Congress couldnt fund enough to save your text
last bar very nice. 7/10

aside from that last bar all your lines were mediocre. It wasn't bad but it wasn't good. no hate. Just work on it.
34/50

CMFS
Que Ball smasher his name... Queen Bitch, and jabber of poo /
This foolz scared to catch aids... Gee Its probably caught you //
not feelin the poo line. but the aid was ok. 5/10
Damn your whole wack verse... and not a single hard punch /
Man you should'a spat first... at a homosexual bar lunch //
feedin. no no. 2/10
I think your probably the gayest fag... too ever be riddlin /
You know you can get anus lag... from bein train drivin //
you kinda punch'd urself knowin about anal lag. 2/10
bet when ya get home...you read my lines and masterbate /
then set ya cell phone... to feel the rhymes on via-brate //
its ok. jus no punch. all sexual mush. 3/10
text styles you read in shame because... i lyrically killed ya /
Next time you see my name it looks... particually familiar //
not feelin this last bar. seem's confusing 2/10

No offense but you do need some work. You probly make alot more sense to yourself than you do to other's. you should work on bein more comprehensible. It's ok tho. no hat. Just work on that.
14/50

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