soldeir
im'a kill this dude, he so stupid, he uses his face for a shield//
i'l punch the shit outa him cos he bites his lines, like tyson outa holyfield//
if he bit he'd be banned. fake personal 2/10
this 13 yr old playa aint getin no whores or groupies, he getin kinda lonely//
got desperate for some the other day so tried to score like Kobe!//
Kobe-played. 1/10
your name ses it all your lil.. you dont want no big boys beef//
ur spittin ya shit, but ya dribblin too wit ya "lil" baby teeth!//
weak punch. 2/10
i'll rip you killas to "lil" pieces without breakin a sweat//
i'l rob ya ass of ya life and you'd still be in my debt//
this was ok. 4/10
this dude wanna jack ma ring, but not the one on my finger or my thumb//
hes only ever been in one pussy and that was his fukin' mums//
last line kinda playe 3/10

This was average. You could have done better. You came a little played in most cases. Work on your creativity and harder punches.
12/50

lil
fix the structure.
u prolly tryin put UK on tha map,
but be able 2 live that long cause of little misshap/
personal. weak punch 2/10
it took me a while 2 spit cause i didnt want 2 leave u embarassed,
u a ho u make more videos then Paris/
funny. creative. 5/10
u tryin 2 rep G-Unit u should cause u look like Lloyd Banks,
lips look like tha tires on a tank/
personal. blah. 2/10
so i guees u tha king of Uk,
but u weak so aint nobody gonna listen 2 wat u say/
UK second time. 1/10
if i was a skateboarder i caould be grindin,on ya linen,
so bitch quit ur whinin
doesnt make sense. 1/10
You need alot of work especially on your structure. The way I fixed it is the way it should look. Your verse was to simple. Your one line wit paris was funny, but still a tad to short on detail. No hate just helping.
11/50

Vote/Soldier

Hit my battles in my sig wit honest votes.

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