Bomber
Don’t try to be a Lloyd Banks wannabe/
You better “beg for mercy” so don’t even try to make a contaversy//
flow is off 1/10
You probably thought I couldn’t spit this hard/
U made the wrong move by choosing that card//
what card? 1/10
Yes the card where u get killed by bomber-z /
Uh huh yea ur getting killed me//
o that card.....not 1/10
This what ima do tie u up n throw in coffin/
Don’t try and mess wit me “I’m steady mobbin”//
self hype. halfa punch 1/10
This is it rip Lethal Lunatic/
Ur not Lethal at all come back against me when u grow a dick//
kinda funny. but dumb also. 2/10
No hate. But you have alot of work to do. Elaborate on your lines more. be more descriptive and creative.
6/50

Lethal
I’m gonna “lyrically bomb” this little stupid kid, cuz he neva knew it
That he was messin wit a lunatic, that can actually spit venomous fluid
personal...but then self hype. 3/10
Your name fits you perfect Bomber-Z, your last against me and alphabetically
Now who’s winnin you or me...well its me, but sorry that you couldn't see
good personall....last line lil filler. 4/10
Sorry that your sig doesnt actually fit you but it does fit me
But now you see...that I do “drop bombs” like a soldier in an army
doesnt' flow. not good. kinda gay. 1/10
This kid ask me can I join your crew, and I said hell now just look at you
I seen your battles and non of your hits, hit they just flew rite through
confusin...jus alot of jibber-filler 2/10
Drop the “nine line” and “blast a shot” lyrically but it can still “hit” you
And now you know how it feels to have a “punch” not pass through
pretty good metiphore/wordplay, easilt best line. 6/10
Structure was good. You have the right idea on personals. Just focus a lil more on your punches now. Not bad. But not good. Just tweak up some thing's. Good Job.
16/50

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