Illiance
It's time to decide who can actually rhyme dude,
You about to get fucked like your who crew's "behind" you,
pretty nice. 6/10
Break your spine through, need more than lines to defeat me,
With a style so stretched I'm surprised you can't "reach" me,
Ok. metiphore so-so. 5/10
Lines finished your styles diminished smile with a grimace,,
You need 24 hours while I've just dropped in five minutes!
was OK. but it aint tru. 4/10
I've got this battle "locked down" with a key to your ass,
5-10 lines? Fuckin retard get back to remedial class,
dont get the first half. second? OK. 4/10
Dawgfatha the distressed emcee trys his best to impress, please-
This ain't a classroom-you need more than a pen and paper to test me.
nice flo. 6/10
You had nice flo wit nice multi's an some ok metiphores thru-out. But honestly you lacked punches. Just work on throwin sum in wit all your multi's.
25/50

Dawgfatha
ayo,
I've got thought seisures,like Harry Benson*
Cept mine can get typed,better watch out and feel the tension
no punch. u talk bout ur seizures 2/10
My punches feel like Muhamed Ali's
Rapping ''quality'' superior to Taleb Quali's
talk bout urself again. 1/10
Trying to be ''brave'' like Atlanta**
But I decide if you get happiness,like a kid wit his ''santa''
atlanta braves..i ge it but NO. santa? NO. 2/10
So decide to back down before its too late
Cause I'll ''beat'' you worse than you do to your dick when you masterbate
Most played line in the world. Beat-Masterbate. 1/10
Stop being lonely for chrissakes find a hoe
Before you turn insane just like Edgar Allan Poe
This isn't school. And I feel like I'm there. Readin this. 2/10
[size=1]You had the right idea in your style and ryhme scheme. But everything else lacked. You need to talk about your opponent, not yourself. Use personal's and direct punches. It will help your verse alot.[/size[
8/50

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