da joka- please stop doing rap now, or elevate a hella lot.... stop trying to rhyme every line and come with an actual punch.... if you do that, you'll improve ten-fold

seventhird you had some wit to your shit, a few basic but OK associations (DC, comic, snipe, ect.) but you need to lose the " " quotes are gay, if the reader can't understand it without the quotes, you need to word it better so they get it.. other than that you seem to be on the right track, keep at it, you took this one with ease

vote - seventhird

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