Intro:
ayo...
Jimmy white tried to catch me by surprise,but when he looked in my eyes,he saw death staring right in the face,bich aint shit but a disgrace,imma dance you outta yo place,when i catch up better embrace my fist but i call it my mace//

ehhhhh... real real real real basic, looks like you were trying to go for some multis, but no...

This is gonna blow your way like your 50 cent hoes
My punches will 'blow you away' like George Bush to Saddam
Watch out homie,don't step on my toes
The government will laugh as I kill you,they don't give a damn

in the first half of that part, the content is PLAYYYYYYYYYYEEEEEEEEEEDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD AS FUCK, then the second half was just weak... "watch out homie, dont step on my toes" uh oh... blah, not to mention i hated the A B A B rhymescheme you used...

My best friend is a member or Parlament
So that explains your cut job,with a reason backed by government

ok, went from ABAB to barely even rhyming... and thats a gay ass rhyme to barely be rhyming

Please don't complain
You're retarted mentality,is hard to explain//

what the fuck? was this your closer because you thought it was good, or because you thought this verse was so wack you shouldn't humiliate yourself any further?

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{1}
Ayo Im critical hittin full to be spittin whole for rapbattlez writtens without hesitance,
this bitch spittin politcal? you spit at blues clues level or as if dr. duess ran for president (basic rhymes + polotical = dawgbitch)

i get it, but im not really feelin it, seems like it could've been alot better

{2}
Im mystikal with fists full of lists full of punches to leave ya heart beat minimal wit the lifeline hittin flat,

i thought this was good

you cant spit raps, i got subliminal gats to create ya fate in a criminal rap, 'dawg' ill leave ya deprived of a mind like lacy petersons ass.

ehhhh... not feelin this... the punches content, not the exact person, but i've seen these types of lines millions of times

{3}
Time to expose hoes like loose pussy in church clothes,
or like dawgfather on rapbattlez set in the ring wit the lyrical godfathers flows...

... i didn't like this

{4}
I see ya quote in rapbattlez "HATERS SUCK MY FUCKING DICK",
well with 90 percent male emcees on the site, you want to get blow'd by all dudes wit an occasional chick?? (nasty shit)

this was good, made me laugh on the inside, not out loud though

{5}
Im debatin this 700 post subliminal newbie with hope,
even if you legally changed ya name to marijuana, you still wouldnt be dope

that content is old & played... i used similar lines to this like 4-5 years ago...


{6}
You 'smoke dolg', man your thirteen and this cat acts like he knew a 'g', (check his profile)
screw this geek, my punches will hit ya harder than ya puberty! (lmfaooooo)

funny, yeah,original? no...

{7}
I hope you fear this, or at least fear fate cuz dawg you almot near it,
no joke, i dont give a fuck if you cant breathe, ill still hold to choke ya spirit

i liked this better than some of your other lines

{8}
The only thing dope in this battle are my lyrics,
the dawgfather_13 being ill is like grizzly adams being beardless. (lmao im watching happy gilmore)

i haven't seen happy gilmore in forever... so no comment

{9}
Shit not even a mother could love you...you think you a challenge to me? WELL FUCK YOU,
the only reason why it seems like im talkin down to ya ass is because im literally a level above you!

good wordplay...

{10}
{calm flow}
now to this early teen, hidden under floorboards, thrown away literally cuz his ass was the family disgrace, mainly a mistake,
sHIT fuck a 'mase', welcome to above ground and dont mind the burning fLEsh scent, its just the smell of youR fate...

good wordplay... i thought the bar as a whole was alright




only thing you really need to work on is your strected bars, and being more creative with your punches...


my vote goes to XxjimmywhitexX... cuz anything could beat dawgfatha13's ass verse

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