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KillaH:your horrid structure most definatly lost you this battle.. very irritating reading that verse.. and thats most definatly not what you want your readers to be when voting on one of your battles.. find some sort of form and mold you verse to that.. take a look in the elevated front lines or soem of the battles in fornlines and you will find some formats.. choose one and try and emulate it.. shoudlhelp you verse tramendously..\
brotha you came decent.. 6/10 verse.. had some witty punches.. one or two lines were pretty wack tho.. but all around decent..\
v/brotha
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