Triple: on the emotion part...it was there. very very deep...felt it. multies in there..vocab was nice....and the key thing was imagery...nice piece 8/10

shadow: just like triple you had nice emotion in there also. flow was a little off in some parts. anger this anger that...not much usage of words? but good piece..
imagery you lack that. 7/10

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