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Old 07-09-04, 10:20 PM   #19
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aight deleon nice powerful verse.first your content was good u knew yourt stuff wit the names and all and everything that was goin on.and how it was nick burg.sometimes u sacrificed the content and clarity of the verse for ur flow.but other times it jus matched up perfect.nice strucutre but structure dont really matter. good beginning.good interlude wit the countries names in the middle it gave u a break from strate text. nice closing it was good
9/10

Lyric not bad.nice content.it was a shorter verse in appearance but the same length stroywise.it was short and sweet fulla a lota described emotions u could sorta picture urself there.and the story seemed like it really happened.flow was good a lota multi rhymes.opener was fast but u explained where you were and why.closer was nice like your reflecting and ur upset about it.
7/10

vote gopes to deleon for a stronger emotion in the verse and more complexity to it aight pc

v/deleon