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Old 07-11-04, 05:14 PM   #14
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aight both verses came up kinda weak.marvolous ur verse has to have some kinda meaning.try makin an opener thats a hard personal cause u had a weak opener.then a hard next punch then keep goin.u had flow but then again u had a weak closer. overall a pretty bad verse. triple aight flow could use some meti rhymes to keep a good flow always do that if u eva do audio. good opener.good closer.strucutre ok try breakin up the lines itll look better. also some of those lines were played out like cancer the only way ur the sickest and hot shit wit chili peppers.played out but it was enough to take this battle both keep practice

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