aalright here...HI-C your talented you have vocab...but reword your liens to make em sound stronger...here i can do one right now

homie you cant win, your rhymes are so typical
into
How You Gon' defeat me, kid your rhymes are so typical....

and put .......... after each line

try to get some personals in there....its good...
other than that its good
good flow...good vocab....ok punches ok personals...good job

golden
your shit was aiight.....u culd of done better..........
your punches were aiight....personals ok
structre...ass... flow......ass..
but you did a good job

vote: HI-C

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