va, like calamity said, i wasnt feelin your structure, but your punches were better, uh, your flow stayed solid with that weird scheme, your vocab was alright but could have been better, i mean it was an ok verse overall.
super, this was your first battle wasnt it? not to sound mean, but that was not good. the rhymes were all typical, recycled-sounding shit and the flow was weak at best. just keep practicing, youll get better..
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