DMX 1
yo yo my name is archmage/i'm slient one /like a slient bomb thats about to go off/if u get in my way/you gonna get courch to death/only my peeps respect me/i make the devil run away/ god fears me / if u mess with me / u are gonna mess with my crew/ my crew will fuck anyone up that messes with me/ i'll ripe people's hearts out/ feed them to my dog/ but before that/choke you to death unit ur thoart is black and blue/ripe ur neck off/piss down your thoart/ watch ur body decay/than go after ur family / make bullets hole through there chests/steal all there money/give the money to the poor/make u squell like a lil girl/if u don't i'll but a 40 ozzi to ta face/than blow your brains out/u fuck with me/u are gonna get fucked up
/\ Blah the structure is completly fucked on that fortunately u got time to improve but a serious structure change is needed i cant make out any of the rhyme schemes...IF there is any i cant see punches personals multies wordplay disses anything it looks like a big self glory verse bler 0/10 Sorry dawg i wasnt feelin it
Rascal
New to RB only personal i would need to get the Win..
tryin to diss me?
...well im gona knock you back like you was Gin..
/\ Nice opener
just 3 posts and stepping to a rep vet?
asked me to call you out...
but your custom text said "I haven't posted yet"..
/\ Ok punch i liked
your fucking wack. i mean who raps about guns still..
put a tablet in sum rice crispies...*
............................Just to say you popped a pill..
/\ Ha nice punch
I checked your life's history, endless chapters of misery..
Now repp your sig sayin..
"Just let me say Rascal just whored me, easily and officially"..
/\ Nice diss good flow
Broke down this hoecake, ok i give up with all the mocking
Your verse has got..
.................. jokes not punches and seriously....... im not joking..
/\ Nice closer u got this piss easy
V/Do i need to say...ok Rascal
RTF on this link...
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132981