yo first off... fuck everybody else for not listenin to this-----
iight heres a little critique-- no hate involved.

On the intro it sound kinda like you tryin to hard to talk to the beat instead of talkin from ya heart--- but then again you from australia if that shits true-- then maybe its a culture thing or just a difference in accent-- whatever--- The cat singin the hook sounds like he got a voice, but his vocals are too low for me to understand to well cuz he's hittin the same notes as the beat so they mesh--- flow wise I think you got the idea, there was some emotion to your voice though it didn't come through very strong, I could see you were rhymin alot without it really soundin like rhymin if that makes sense to you, its like you weren't emphasizing the same sounds in the same places, just work on that-- I think your lyrics were on point and I felt the topic- keep doin this, get better-- stay up... 1

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