alrite, spitaflame, decent opener, wasnt anythin amazin by any means.. second bar was good, prolly ya best. 3rd bar was boring, pretty weak punchline.. 4th bar was sloppy, too many syllables in the second line, 5th bar was pretty good, but once again, wheres the punchline... 6th bar was basically just self glorification, no amazing punchline..

if i can offer you some tips to elevate, you should try and use less filler in your verses, try and make a few words rhyme every line as opposed to only having the last word in the line rhyme, that will vastly improve flow and give you more content in your bars. and also, you need to improve on punchlines, look at his profile, some of his old posts and find weaknesses, then crack really good jokes to ruin his ego.. but anyway..

da vinci, first bar, the punch was a bit stretched out, decent punch, but nuthin special, 2nd bar was pretty good, the fortune cookies bit was good, 3rd bar was good, got the punch pretty easy.. 4th bar worked ok, closer, you said battle too many times, and it finished pretty weak..

overall, da vinci took this, spitaflame, u need to elevate a fair bit bro, even tho there was a lot of filler in da vinci's verse i didnt notice it as much because it was worded a bit better. so vote goes to da vinci..

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