ok.. play-toh.. first line was ok, second line.. i dunno what u were gettin at by sayin raps his faverout form (doesent relly make sence) losses come into his wackness didnt really make sense either, but i got what you were trying to say and it wasnt bad.

tourn, playin on playdough, got that from the word go, sort of a weak first line though, second line didnt have enough syllables.. and toh and knows doesent rhyme.. i think you underestimated the other kid in this and didnt try hard enough..

it was pretty weak overall from both textees.. but to tell the truth.. play-toh worked it a little better, less filler, and the end of each line rhymed better.
im gonna have to give this vote goin to play-toh.....

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