im guessing this is from a topical league or something. This was good the flow was on point & the internals worked really well, it also gave it an aggressive feel.

My favourite lines were

One glance in the mirror i stare just to pause and think
Then i applaud the shrink who claimed i had no problems, now parts of him remain in my apartment sink

^Awesome. I cant add any more to make this piece even better, erm...it wudda been kooler if instead o f writing out the scenario you could of told more of a story to lengthen the piece.

Nice piece, one of the best Ive read here.