Thread: COM Vs Calamity
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Old 07-19-04, 01:45 PM   #5
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Originally Posted by COM
I'm the master, I'll surpass ya and if you think that shit will bother me...
Watch me change ya mind faster... than an on the spot lobotomy...
A fucking victim of sodomy...so go ahead and ditch ya plan...
Because I'll leave this faggot gutted.... like a hetro strippergram..
Your going down, take more chances... it doesnt matter what my schedule be
I'm gonna be labeled a paodophile for taking this kid out regularly..
I heard of you faggot....I heard its not girls that you spy
So how the fuck you gonna get past me?... when you're allready bi?
Are you ready to die?... your rhymes are obseleet I'm yawning
I'll hang this bitch out to dry.........
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.......................................... like his bedsheets in the morning.....


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Opener was coo... pedophile line was ok, past me/bi was ok... closer eh. Not bad for 20 minutes.

Quote:
Originally Posted by calamity
Cementing ya mic is the only way you get To Rock it..
and samplin gunshots on Songs only way they poppin..
eh.. the wording is a bit off. not to mention that the gunshots thing been done often and you didn't make much of it.
im flying solo, while you still stuck in back cock pits..
asked him to cut a track, muphucka went to choppin'..
eh.. simple wordplay.
aint seen you in a while, so im skeptical on how u dissin..
I bring flows of holy men, leave you kneed like a Christian..
blah
Callin out to the best, when you not worthy of scorn..
Choppin ya skull open in lighting, to Give u a Brain storm..
ok... probably your best wordplay even if not that original. notice how its more developed of a metah, as well as more of a diss/threat...
You dont bring heat, Waves of wisdom leaves him calm..
I got more Super powers, than Characters from CAPCOM..
[b]see how this is the exact opposite? first of all, there is no punch/diss. you just upping yourself. second of all, the wordplay is useless... CAPCOM? who cares... just cuz you put his name in there don't make it nice. its kinda witty had you made a punch of it


So yeah... elevate on your wording... work on worrying more about well developed metas and relevent wordplay. I mean.. you already had CAPCOM... that easily goes to: cap COM ... not to mention COM is in genesis... cap COM made games for genesis... there were places to go with that.. but you didn't do much with it.
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