String9487

eh yo who the hell want it?/
u woulda thought u ate peanuts the way i put shells in ya stomach//
->>your bar lengths are all over the place...cool concept

my flow out this world like, welcome to earth/
round have u in the ground gettin welcome to dirt//
->>wack

its seldom i squirt/
but if a clown talk trash its his melon i burst//
->>sounds forced and gun talk is played

you provisional acts, i chop lies, deliver the facts/
the only label u on is for nutritional packs//
->>what the fuck is he a calorie? i see where you were going but it doesnt make sense

and u know u get zero deals/
im movin wit big Heat, like im shaquille o'neal//
->>ok

dont end up wit an open neck/
n u like Rodney dangerfield, dog u gets no respect//
->>pretty cool

aint no game how i work the mac, who the first to clap?/
n bring the heat like a thermostat//
->>gun talk turned me off to this but cool meta

cuz u kno im the important type/
if it aint nailed down then its bought n priced//
->>what??

dont a make a nigga off ya life/
and im like Mars son im come wit sweet bars to bite//
->>pretty good

didnt rate your second spit...you only get one


Justify

Okay string, said you were gonna "rip" me
When the only thing you'll rip is a bad beat
->>wack

Your new to RB talkin like you Numba one
Well pay attention to this fuckin malediction
->>what in the HELL is a malediction...rhyme dictionary word for sure

Punches flyin fast and hard penetratin the skin
Comin at ya faster than you hittin on senile men
->>decent

Sorry kid, I didnt mean to incriminate
but look at ya verses and ya flow..ya need to elev8
->>first line doesnt make sense

So justify the reason that you be comin at me
Lost in you're dream world caught up in infidelity
->>infidelity? doesnt make sense


String you need to even up your bars and quit talking about killing...you got a good mind for metas so use it. Justify you need to elevate a lot. Both read the tutorials they helped me out a lot. No hate coming from me cause I dont know either one of you...im just helping. Youll both get better but String took this one.

v/String

\/hit these up honestly\/

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