SLUGGA
dont put the /s at the end of ur lines...its newbish...dont type in all caps either...it looks retarded...structure wasnt very good...lines were very unorganized...flow fell off...no good metas...no good wordplay...none of ur punches connected...no good personals...

*The~Star*
structure is good...flow is on lock...u had some nice metas...wordplay was ok...some of ur punches connected...no good personals...

Overall
neither had good personals...*The~Star* had the better structure...as well as the more stable flow...more, and better metas...as well as wordplay...*The~Star* also had more connecting punches...so basing off of that...*The~Star* gets my vote...

VOTE - *THE~STAR*