bullethole

Yo my rymes are like a trivia/
they fuk ure head up like cociane from bolivia/
->>Raw imma give it to ya, with no trivia
->>raw like cocaine straight from Bolivia
->>Wu Tang Clan "Da Mystery of Chessboxin"
->>dont know if u bit it or coincidence but had to point it out

u aint herd of me u must be a hermit/
my rymes is tight so u better learn it/
->>decent

weather or not i drop sumthin hot i always got tha flow/
lettin other mc's now that i'll bury ure dead body in the snow/
i aint puttin on no show so if u fuk wit me u better lay low/
->>flow is fukked and played topics

smoke up the last of your weed/
->>rhyme scheme in these next lines is fukked

coz im gonna plant a lyrical seed in your brain you wont forget/
->>decent

my skill make other rappers regret getting into this game its a damn shame/
->>weak

that i keep droppin shit making make peeps lose a little bit a credit/
->>weak

ure ryme u might aswell shred it coz nefing i say will beat it so ure fake ass verse just keep it
->>weak closer


Trajed'ee


U got tha name Bullethole from tha way I pull it slow//
Click clack wit a sick MAC, I leave you full of holes//
->>ok but gun talk is played

MC from an out of area real, shinin like diamonds, fuck a jewel Im a gem//
Im B-I-G- you Lil like Kim, played out wit a dick in ya mouth spittin bout rims//
->>lines are way too long and i didnt really get it

My SOULdiers get live from front 2 back, and leave cats slumped wit chunks blew out they back//
Feel tha funk rattle ya trunk, unsigned hype, hypin tha track//
Tongue tied fights be providin tha facts of I destroy tha wack//
->>thought this line was ok

Dirty and gritty, gots tha grimey grime//
No mercy, attitude shitty, known to smack a clown from time to time//
->>decent

Yo sweet like Hersheys brandishin unloaded 9's//
That type of shit'll have you duckin and vanishin wit ya body corroded by 9's//
->>second line way stretched

So trust its loaded when I got minez... cause these streets is war//
Aint shit funny I'll pull back ya grin wit 4-4's//
Drive bys, strays eject out windows of 4 doors...//
->>its ok

Lookin to expose targets, I decompose faggots who perpetrate to be tha hardest//
->>reminded me of those closers where the beat stops and you keep going...not a bad thing just thought of that


bullethole your rhyme scheme made yours hard to read...internal rhymes are fine but you have to have end rhymes or it wont work. Trajed'ee your lines are too long but at the end they got nice length. Gun-talk got annoying to. vote goes to Trajed'ee because his shit rhymed a lot better and was just all-around better. Bullethole just needs to keep elevating..no hate here though.

\/both yall hit this up honestly\/

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