I agree... Felt more like a quick snapshot of your life, and you wrote it out in rhyme. Only thing I didnt like was the first "bar" should have ben "hearin' me" instead of hear me. LOL. Sorry - dont mean to be anal, but just flowed better in my mind. Gave a good pic of what you were talking about though - this was nice. I'm mos def stoppin in here more often - ya'll got some talent in the poetry section. Even if it's not poetry but written thought.

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