WillNova
dont put the /s at the end of ur lines...and dont make ur font so big...its mad newbish...structure was alright...flow fell off a little bit...u had some tight multis...ur imagery wasnt very good...emotion was decent...u went about the topic in a weird way...it seemed u fell off of writin with the topic sometimes as well...

Lethal Lunatic
dont put the ~s at the beginning and end ur lines...we all know when they begin and end, they arent necessary...structure was good...flow was on target...u had a few multis...u had decent imagery...not very good emotion...u went about the topic in a pretty predictable way, but stayed on topic the whole way through...

Overall
WillNova had more emotion...as well as more multis...Lethal Lunatic had the better structure...the more stable flow...better imagery...and he stayed on topic better...so basing off of that...Lethal Lunatic gets my vote...

VOTE - LETHAL LUNATIC