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Old 07-22-04, 11:06 PM   #23
The Black Plague
... I Dont Hate...
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J took this wit better punches, better wordplay and jus and overall better verse...

Gee- Not bad, punches was way played, you had a lot of " fag" jokes, which get old quick. Your verse was simple tho, and you tried too hard on ya personals but they didn't connect. Nice struc and flow, but that dont win battles...

J- Nice verse, you elevatin a lot. Nice punches, a few of your punches really killed him, and your personals were hittin nice too. Your struc was nice too, and you flowed nicely. Overall nice verse, still got room for elevation...
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