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Old 07-23-04, 10:26 AM   #20
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Weak Battle....

Plustwo - Punches were really weak. Stretched lines, so it was hard to read. Weak Personals. No great wordplay or metaphors. Elevate.

Wolf - Fix your structure. Don't put the spaces and try not to rhyme 3 lines. Anyways punches hit harder. No personals. Keep Elevating.

V/Wolf - Theres not much of anything so it comes to the punches and Wolf's hit harder.
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