breaking this shit down

One-Man-Band

yo, ima pierce ya chest with spears n techs, ya get shot, popped n soon ya knocked
when ya peep my rap, ya jaw drops.. not just cos im dope, but ya make room fa cocks
nice opening 5/10

yo, im signed my bustin rocks, check it kid, spit acid leave ya lyin ruptured hot
son, I got no respect for gangsta wannabes.. only thing you ridin ruff is cocks
personal aint that hard 6/10

pumped n locked, steady to show herbs n noobs that bands reppin it dope
this wannabes like a loaded glock.. the kids always ready to blow!
fucked the rhyme at the end not much of a punch 3/10

yo watch me "reel in the votes" once im done "liftin out ya lines"
this kids "bitin his hooks" .. theres somethin "fishy bout ya rhymes"
not bad not good either 4/10

18/40
4.5/10

ok the verse wasnt that good you had a personal and a punch good structure and flow its just not enough you need harder punches and improve your vocab and imagination
plus writting in small font really doesnt help


Ruffridah187


Look you wanna be Obie Trice, motha fucka i'm droppin the dice but i aint rappin for my life
Let's get this right, you think goin 2 rounds might favor me, it'll favor you fo' sho' aight
not sure about the flow you forced the second line to rhyme 4/10

Don't act like we tight cuz this aint quite a battle man it's a lyrical fight
My rhymes so ruthless that they'll knock out yo' lights
nice but where is the punch 4/10

You call yourself a One Man Band?
This aint rock, this rap and if you aint used to it then don't come back to rap music
no flow shit over all 1/10

You didn't just come to rap you flew to it
Rap didn't work for you so go rock, go back to it
forced to rhyme with a semipunch 4/10

That name is simulated to you, straight pussy and there's proof to it
Like your rhymes shown
My shit just put your nose on to the grindstone
best so far 5/10

And you call yourself the master of mul-ties?
I'll merk the shit out of you in every category and win with ease
no punch 4/10

Please man why would you fuck with shit relentless as this?
Should just call this a 186 cuz i haven't murdered you yet bitch
ok 4/10

Goin against you aint a risk cuz i control you dude like i was your ventriloquist
The most illest of our time rhymin with many buckets full of skills
no real rhyme 4/10

Your rhymes stink so bad that it had everyone rapidly leave the building like it was a fire drill
I know my rhymes give you chills all the way up yo' spine faster than plants fill with chlorophyll
better bar of the battle 7/10

So man get real cuz you aint ill, my rhymes kill yours faster then i actually could one of those bitches from Sill
So call this a 187 now cuz my rhymes murderd yours from a-z
From 7 11 to a gro-ce-ry store man don't you resent goin against me?
no rhyme again 3/10

40/100
4/10

this verse lacked structure and flow and me judging on the hole thing instead of picking the punches that i like and give you a win you had harder punches fair enough but the rest is shit so the average pulled you down i say if you wrote smaller verse with the good punches in it you would'v won it

my vote goes to one man band for having a better flow structure it was close the battle wasnt great
vote;1manband

with respect for both of you

hit up my battles