troubledinocense

here it goes....
let me murder this guy wit quick raps/
ya punch lines hit soft callem bitchslaps//
ummm ......

get back..cause ya style is backed up/
just by ya name i can tell that use a wack fuck//
ummmm.....

right now i can be runnin the game/bustin them thangs/
have u movin like that guy dancing under ya name//
he aint dancing hes spinning the turn-tables weak....

two more punches and i just might zone out/
two more punches and ill make ya mind blown out//
weak...

whoa ya style went from "mint" to a ~mess~/
my punchlines hit hard till u see imprints on ya chest//
i see effort in this bar, its ok..

i need somebody on my cock to run round wit/
but not you dawg cause ur ass is dumbfounded//
that was weak and dumb....

now that i spit i hope u gon say shit/
my bars is bullets spit it under ya chin to give u a facelift......
weak ending u could of hit harder all around....

this was basic and sorda lame in some parts dont take it personal just work on being more creative and hit harder...

5.0

Da Prodigy

yo/get uh grip ..ya style is fucked up 4 real...
u shouldnt be rappin u should be singin pop like pharrel...
ok,

this guy has no talent..he needs ta prepare a little more...
u dont wana rap..ya mom made ya do it 4 uh chore..
weak...

he has no rhythem cuz he comin 2 weak...
cuz if he did he'd know he's already been "beat"...
ummm....

this guy is wack..theres no fuckin with the prod..
da punchlines hit ya chin..make ya whole head nod...
ok,

just get it threw ya mind..u just got served..
when this battle is over u'll be servin me orderves...
ok,

u could never be nothin..except pamperin ya pimp...
cuz u cant lift uh "bar" cuz u buit lika wimp...
u tryed to be creative here i give u a E for effort...
but try and reword that whole bar with the same idea and u could of hit harder...

he needs ta get more focused...he's still listenin 2 me go..
usin his pen and pad..takin notes on howta flow...
weak ending..

i saw u tryed to be creative in some areas but fall short on the hard hit but all around if u keep trying u can elevate dog...

6.0 outta 10

my vote: Da Prodigy