4Blood2Hound0
dont put the /s at the end of ur lines...its newbish...structure isnt very good...ur lines were goin all over the place...flow fell off due to the lack of consistency in the structure...no multis...wordplay isnt good...a few, at best, of ur punches connected...no good personals...

schema
dont space out ur lines...its mad annoying...structure is good...flow is on target...u had no multis...wordplay isnt good at all...some of ur punches connected...personals were decent...

Overall
neither had multis...neither had good wordplay...schema had the better structure...the more stable flow...more connecting punches...and better personals...so basing off of that...schema gets my vote...

VOTE - SCHEMA