emasraW
dont put the /s at the end of ur lines...its newbish...structure is good...flow is on target...u had a few multis...no good wordplay...none of ur punches connected...no good personals...

HellRaZoR
dont put the /s at the end of ur lines...its mad newbish...structure isnt good...some of ur lines were stretched...flow fell off due to the stretchnes...no multis...wack wordplay...none of ur punches connected...no good personals...

Overall
neither had good wordplay...neither had connecting punches...neither had good personals...emasraW had the better structure...the more stable flow...and more multis...so basing off of that...emasraW gets my vote for the better overall verse...

VOTE - EMASRAW

PLEASE return the favor with an honest vote on the first link in my sig against hotshh!...thanx...